Post by CrimsonDawn on Feb 10, 2014 13:28:19 GMT
(Just a small background for this, I am working hand in hand with my fellow classmate in creating a very unique hymn for our college department, which is the college of Education. Now I am tasked to make the lyrics, and my fellow classmate will put music to it. I know that when he'll add music to it, lots of revisions will happen, but I really don't care about it. All I want to do here is just to find out how I go with sonnet making. I'd be thanking every critique who will give their corrections and enhancements to these sonnets I have made.)
Books and Apples' Sonnets
-I-
Hear the Team of Educators proclaim
Our blazing hearts gone driven by one fate
Fill not the pail but put their minds in flame
Enlighten their minds out from the dark state.
In unison, with our infamous might
Imparting the skills they'll do for their life
Correct what's wrongly taught and make it right
To students whose lives were put to some strife.
The tribulations we'll all be facing
Will try to hinder our main objective
A hard job for us, the task's beckoning
Us to give in, and failures we'll achieve.
But at the end of the day, it is still
Teaching's the noblest profession, it's real.
-II-
Behold the Team of Educators say
Humbly we are the creme of all the crops
We're trained for perfection, shouting hurray!
As we have obtained a place at the top.
Though we are all in great diversity
From us transcended the bricks that don't break
It's worth calling us "UNIVERSITY"
United in diversity we take.
Those sticks and stones thrown by the envious
May put us down and complain for the pain
It causes but we know there is no use
We're strong enough, we will not be in vain.
And at the end of the day, it is still
Teaching's the noblest profession, it's real.
P.S. It is extremely hard to make an iambic pentameter. >.<