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Post by Rested on Jul 8, 2014 10:40:44 GMT
I entered late to find him gone
And now I don't know where they're from,
These words I used to find so well
Now abstract logically dispelled.
I can't pretend I knew his face,
His laughter nor true friendship's grace,
But words from him, I knew them well,
The passion in them through I fell.
Now I try to write once more,
To honour all the sparks he saw.
For now these words are all I find,
But maybe out the hole I'll climb.
I missed my friends from times gone by
And once again I might arrive,
But never more I'll know his heart,
Written on the screen as art,
Hard it is to fathom why
I should pluck my pen and try.
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Post by Jamie on Jul 15, 2014 20:36:54 GMT
Welcome! Beautiful poem, effortless rhyme and a quiet grace. A fine thing to read at the end of this long day, I truly enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing with us.  |
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Post by ebonfire on Jul 23, 2014 14:58:36 GMT
Nicely done, quiet rhythm and rhyme like an inner pondering...welcome. peace
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Post by Rested on Oct 12, 2014 10:42:12 GMT
Heh. Didn't expect this to still be up. Thanks for the responses though. It's been a long time since I've written any poetry. I don't really want to start it up again, and I didn't want to go into it at the time, but I used to be a member of TPS and then poetshare. I was gone for a while and when I came back I found out the news about Jay. So that's what this is. Anyway, it's good to see some old faces. It's just a shame this place doesn't have more traffic. I barely know who anyone at TPS is anymore. Thanks again to you both |
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Post by - Moirae - on Mar 1, 2015 1:29:31 GMT
Your opening stanza was stunning. In fact it had me absolutely captivated. Your flow and distinct direction made me feel even more... I don't know the right word I want to use here...maybe hollow? After reading your response regarding Jay...it made perfect sense and it's similar to how I felt when I heard. For what it's worth it'd wonderful if you give writing a go again...trust me it isn't easy to come back to it (as I'm trying to do that myself) but it does take me back to the old days on TPS. No matter what you choose...I have throughly enjoyed reading your work.
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Post by Rested on Apr 30, 2015 4:56:49 GMT
Thank you Moirae. I would like to come back to it but it's funny - a lot of the joy I experienced in writing poetry came from the people I was writing for/with on TPS a few years ago. I hadn't even realised it until now, but the whole process is kind of just not the same anymore. I don't consider myself a very good poet, and I never wrote for the sake of making anything of my poetry. It was more that I just enjoyed writing and sharing. That shouldn't stop me from writing, and perhaps in the long run it won't, but it's just not as inspiring at the moment. With most people having disappeared, and Jay not among us anymore, it's just kind of... Almost hollow. But thank you for your words. They give me some hope that I'll be able to get back to it at some point |
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